Well, it was just sitting on my 'Piper + Meredith' folder doing nothing so I thought, what the hell, post it. This chapter is a little more emotional than most and it's up to you guys if it works or not. As things stand, it really made me realize that the story would've been better told from Meredith's point of view -- which is why the next chapter, eleven, will be the last. After that I'm going to write an epilogue told entirely from Meredith's point of view.
A reader from the Nifty Archive e-mailed me and mentioned that although she loved Meredith, she didn't see what Merry saw in Piper, and in someways I see that I haven't done enough to explain why two women (Kristen and Meredith) would be so madly in love with her. The epilogue will go a long way to explaining that. I'm gunning for maybe 15,000 words or so. Anyway, enough about that. You won't be seeing it for at least another fortnight. Here's chapter ten.
http://original.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600098655&chapter=10
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Ah, you're right, emotional scenes are tricky balancing acts. I think you hit all the right points however. The utter hopelessness of the situation for Piper was enunciated clearly. Obviously we're yet to see Meredith's side of the coin, but you showed Piper's decision in a necessary light. Grim reality has finally set upon both lead characters and Piper's reconciliation with Kristen was a nice touch. Great job on this chapter - no easy task I'm sure.
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I think you are good at emotional scenes,especially this one ,it was not easy but you handled this well.. i can t wait for the last chapter!! Great job guy! You really did good .
Damn, you know how to do a dramatic ending!
A few thoughts:
I'm really puzzled by Piper's assessment that "No one knew her like Kristen did. Not even Meredith." Hasn't one of Piper's main beefs with Kristen been that the heiress didn't know her as well as she thought she did?
I'm guessing that Meredith will point out the unfairness (and irony) of the suddenness of Piper's ultimatum in the next chapter.
Nice touch with the wineglass!
Love the whole thing
Huh, you know, now that you've broken the characters about there is an opening to explain things from both sides. I'm interested in seeing how this turns out, I've been following it the whole way :)
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