Here it is, guys. The eighteenth and final chapter of My Girl is My Poison. As I said a while back my main objective right now is to finish some of my stories and I think this is the one that needed the least steps toward closure. I've been working on My Girl is My Poison for over two years and I still had so much planned for it, which you will find out about when you read this, but I decided the story can end just fine where it has -- with Lisa and Dani finally beginning to embark upon a normal, healthy relationship. My only regret is that I would've liked to have written a brief sex scene for the two of them, to kind of cement and consummate the comfort Lisa now has with Dani, but I wanted the epilogue to be light-hearted too, and sex would've fucked up the rhythm of the chapter, so I had leave that planned scene on the proverbial editing room floor. Oh well. I hope you enjoy what you have here all the same.
Read and be merry!
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Well, I stumbled over Piper & Meredith on Fictionpress a few weeks ago, and decided to check out your blog. Finding My Girl Is My Poison on here was a treat, and I've really enjoyed the story. Your characters were written well, and consistently, and you really showed the point where Lisa's priorities changed in regards to Nicole and Dani. One minute she was supposedly crushing on Nicole, and the next she was worried about Dani, and the characters transformed marvelously to fit in with Lisa's perceptions of them. It was all very well done, although Lisa seems to own a transsexual cat :D
Piper's cameo in the Epilogue both scares and excites me, because although it is clear that things don't quite work out with Meredith, she's not completely broken as I feared she would become. I can only hope for the future, yeah?
Thanks for reading, Berndi. And thanks for your reviews on Fictionpress.net too, it keeps me posting there.
As for Piper's cameo? I think the nature of Piper and Meredith's relationship, not so much the "stepmother" thing but the age thing, kinda doom the relationship before it even begins. I don't plan to end the story tragically, but they certainly wouldn't last as a couple.
Crap. I hope that doesn't spoil anything for you! ^_^
I enjoyed the ending very much, it's not always an easy task to tie things off, but you did this seamlessly. The inclusion of Piper was cool too and no doubt there will be further developments on her story. I'm glad that Smells Like Sapphic Spirit requires more work to get finished (this means I can expect more chapters in the future YES!). It was interesting too that you showed a teen pregnancy without the disaster - there's a lot to be said for family support in those situations. Great job and I shall await additional chapters to some of your older works (Those Who Live Between Reason and Emotion or Smells Like Sapphic Spirit perhaps?) with much anticipation. Although I am enjoying your newer stories as well (Piper and Elizabeth Harvey), I am conscious of your determination to conclude older writings, thus the direction of my encouragement.
Operculum
Thanks, Operculum. I was worried about the Nicole pregnancy thing, I thought it might be too sudden a stroke to swallow, but I guess I wanted to communicate that teenage pregnancy doesn't have to be the end of the world. It's not ideal, but it happens and I think parents have a responsibility to stand by their kids even when something like that happens. Plus, there are two new babies in my family (both boys, one born a week ago while his cousin was born shortly before Christmas) so it was a lot easier to write about with them in mind.
As for updates? Smells Like Sapphic Spirit still has a while before it's finished, I'm hoping to have a fresh chapter for it by the end of next week (as well as Chapter Eight of Piper + Meredith by Monday-Tuesday) but Those Who Live Between Reason and Emotion needs to be re-thought. P+M has kind of taken over as my 'age gap' story, but that was always going to be the main theme of TWLBRAE; and since I don't like the idea of writing two stories with the same theme at once, I feel like I need to shift the direction toward the "teacher/student" dynamic so that there's a clear distinction between it and P+M.
The problem though, is that if I focus on the teacher/student thing for TWLBRAE I'd also have to highlight the legal aspect of the story (as well as the moral) and I feel like that would detract from the romance of the story. I'm not sure how I should handle that yet. But I'll figure it out.
Really,you do have a skill for driving a story! Thanks for update the ending. And for "Reason and Emotion" i really think that you could handle the legal/moral aspect of the storie,have a look on the movie Loving Annabelle... (you can watch it on Youtube)
I have to say mate.
Awesome story!
Not too short not too long.
Great writing.
Amazing story!
Was referred to this story by a friend, and this was truly amazing.
I felt like I was reading something out of a book from a well known author. Was honestly of that quality.
This is the first story I've read of your works, so i'm sure to read others.
Truly enjoyed it. Amazing work.
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